Dreamy's Lessons.

[&&Ðяëāmÿ[ðòñò]]

Anyone who wants to come and learn how to RolePlay or increase their RolePlaying skills, come here! Please.

[alex7twitchy]

I'm good at rolePlay but could use so help....will you help me out?

[&&Ðяëāmÿ[ðòñò]]

Alright. No one else will be taught until I am done with this student. Give me any post that you want and I'll see if there is anything that needs to be done about it. My teaching ways are obviously different.

[alex7twitchy]

the cool rain pours through the leaves and onto kira as she runs through the forest. she waves in and out of trees. her white fur flows like water in the wind. she pads to a stop......then shakes the water white pelt.

[&&Ðяëāmÿ[ðòñò]]

It's not that bad, but .... You have a lot of mistakes. Try capitalizing first and then add in you comma's and quotation marks. It should end up looking like this and remembe, to describe how your charecter is feeling. Be descriptive.


The cool rain poured through the leaves and onto Kira as she ran through the forest. She waved in and out of trees, her white fur flowing like water in the wind. She padded up to a stop and then shook her water white pelt.


It should look something more like that.

[alex7twitchy]

ok......so anouther example would be.
" The dripping of the nights dew, ehos in iceshroud's ears. But the silver cat lie still in his moss bed. His once sleek black coat was stained and matted with dry blood and dirt. " How could they do this to me?" the black cat thought, leting memories of the night before flood into his mind."

[&&Ðяëāmÿ[ðòñò]]

Somewhat but try this instead. What your doing is, I think, writting in second person? Remember, punctuation, capatalization, and spell check.

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The dripping of the night's dew echoed in Iceshroud's ears. But the silver cat layed still in his moss bed. His once sleek black coat was stained and matted with dry blood and dirt. " How could they do this to me?" the black cat thought, letting memories of the night before flood into his mind.

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You'll have all of your punctuation and stuff like that. Try not to rush through your post. Take time to think and go back if you make any mistakes. Sorry if I seem a bit hard on you but I can't promise that I will go easy on you.

[alex7twitchy]

you're no being as stricked(sp?) as my english teacher was.....i miss spelled like 1 word in a 2 and 1/2 page essay and i had to rewrite te whole thing.....thank god school's out.

" kiba pads slowly through the moonlit forest. The cat's sleek orange coat gleems in the light of the full moon. The orange cat walks into a clearing~one he knows well~ Then kiba quickly pads to the edge of a pond in the clearing's center. " who am I?" the orange cat asks himself outloud, Leting memories of all that happened that night flood his mind." How could they lie to me all the years i've been with them?" Kiba questions angerly."

[&&Ðяëāmÿ[ðòñò]]

I think I see what your problem is. Capitalization and you forget to add "ed" to the end of words. I'll underline the words I mean and need correcting and put words you should have capitalized in bold, italics for those that should not be capital.

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kiba pads slowly through the moonlit forest. The cat's sleek orange coat gleems in the light of the full moon. The orange cat walks into a clearing~one he knows well~ Then kiba quickly pads to the edge of a pond in the clearing's center. " who am I?" the orange cat asks himself outloud, Leting memories of all that happened that night flood his mind." How could they lie to me all the years i've been with them?" Kiba questions angerly.

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Now then, I'm going to give you an idea on how it looks when you fix all of that.

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Kiba padded slowly through the moonlit forest, the cat's sleek orange coat gleamed in the light of the full moon. The orange cat walks into a clearing~one he knew well~ Then Kiba quickly padded to the edge of a pond in the clearing's center. " Who am I?" The orange cat asked himself out loud, letting memories of all that happened that night flood his mind." How could they lie to me all the years I've been with them?" Kiba questioned angrily.

[alex7twitchy]

ic.......i get it now.